Thesis statement: It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big cty.
Supporting idea 1: Children who grow up in countryside is more healty.
For example: The countryside children have more immunity than the city children.
Supporting idea 2: They eat organic foods.
For example: In countryside people work with livestock production or agriculture.
Supporting idea 3: They live their childhood more better than staying in front of the internet or playstation.
Supporting idea 4: They live in a safer place because of the city's crime rate.
Supporting idea 5: They live in a polluted environment.
Opponent's ideas: They think they have more advantage like cinema,theatre,internet... But they forget much technology affects small chilhdren in a negative aspect.
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Please modify your thesis statement a bit. You have stated your preference; however, the reason for your preference is not clear. It is better if you mentioned it in your thesis statement.
YanıtlaSilYou supporting idea 5 is not clear. Where do they live in a polluted environment?
In your final statement, you should refute opponent's ideas but you haven't mentioned it. After modifying your outline, you can start writing your paragraph.